Sunday, June 2, 2013

Monthly TOEFL essay #2: The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer.

           Once, wars reigned on the lands of Asia and Europe through the bloody cries of civil population. Once, Martin Luther King Jr. stood on the ground of Lincoln Memorial and carried out the words of freedom and equality. Once, humanity reached a consensus upon the Universal Declaration of Human Rights. Now, the new century has begun. It has brought us with inconceivable advances in technology accompanied by globalization. Great affluence came in, replenishing our infinite desires for a better quality of life. But in my opinion, this century will be an era of equality rather than of further economic development.
         Rights of LGBT will be greatly enhanced in the 21st century. LGBT, standing for lesbian, gay, bisexual, and transgender, has stood on the social minority for most of human history. For example, the dominating religion in the Middle Ages, Christianity condemned homosexuality as a sin, and homosexuals were considered as equivalent to infidels. In the 20th century, however, some influential figures like singer Elton John openly confessed their homosexuality and was followed a worldwide scramble for LGBT rights. The rights of LGBT have now grown as one of the major contemporary issues. Controversy over gay marriage is a first step in this. While some religion groups are still against the expansion of the definition of marriage, many countries in Europe including Denmark and many states in the U.S. are allowing gay marriage. As more people are willing to openly orient their sexuality and fighting for the social atmosphere to change, hostility against LGBT will gradually diminish and further rights will be prepared.


Scramble for 'Equal Love' 
computer for the blind
           The physically disabled will be substituted with technological developments to reach closer to equality. Currently, technologies involved in smart phones are used by companies to create a computer for the blind. While this case is only a small contribution in the overall enhancement of the quality of life for the disabled, this shows that technologies may help the disabled in carrying out various works they hadn't been able to do before. This will help them in widening their scope of careers, enhancing their competency compared to workers without disability. Similar levels of achievement in both groups will lead to improvement in the status of the disabled among social members. The position of the disabled in the society will elevate.           

           Equality will be attained throughout the 21st century as a result of changes in technology and conception. While it is only natural that the human race progresses towards an egalitarian society, 20th century has shown a retreat in this through dreadful incidents, one of them namely the Holocaust. Having established a relatively peaceful world, people of the 21st century will now focus on repairing the nightmares and taking further steps in the preservation of human dignity. 

3 comments:

  1. Nice hook! And it was refreshing to read about how the twenty-first century will be about equality rather than technological advance

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  2. Very well written essay!! Enjoyed reading it and I agree that these are some of the changes that are possible to happen in the 21st century. However, about the issues of LGBT, I possess and contradictory opinion to yours, since I am one of those who think that these are sins, as a christian. Controversy about this issue is still going on, whether it is a matter of difference or right and wrong, but it was good to know your opinion about it.. Thanks for your essay!!

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  3. You too had a very interesting subject. Many fellows have wrote about biology, internet, computer, and so on, but none has thought of such idea like this. I was really interested. I don't exactly know about your first paragraph but I really liked the second. What was good about this essay is that it focused solely on one topic, while some students, probably a lot, has write different subjects that are irrelevant to each other. I have not many things to say because your English skill would be much better than mine, but it is definitely a brilliant essay!

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